A hand is sketching a random cartoon character on an otherwise blank piece of paper. A clock ticks. A girl is staring lazily at her work. Students in a classroom are bent over their papers, writing furiously. The girl glances up at the clock. It ticks three times and the bell rings.
Students put their papers on a table at the front of the classroom. The girl, alone, is last to leave. She puts her sketch on the top of the other papers. As she goes toward the door, she sees a boy waiting at the door. He tells her goodbye and says he’ll see her later. The girl smiles.
She girl walks down the hallway and stops at the end. She stares at the other students, laughing and chattering. She stares longingly, but instead changes directions to go a less-populated way to class.
As she turns a corner, she sees a bully picking on the boy that said bye to her. She stops to look and then continues toward them, asking the bully what he is doing. The bully says they're just messing around and tells her to clear out. She squints her eyes very tightly and turns on her heel to leave the scene.
Once again she is doodling in class, but it is a picture of herself kicking the boy. The teacher is rambling on indistinctly in the background. The clock ticks several times. She notices that the bully is sitting in front of her. The girl accidentally drops her pencil, so she goes down to get it. As she does this the bully gets up to sharpen his pencil. She sees his planner on the floor. It says at the bottom “Ballet Recital: 4:00”. She smiles evilly. She gets up again with her pencil. The bully returns to his seat, completely unaware that the girl was snooping. The bell rings.
The girl walks into the office to turn in a paper. She notices an empty administrator’s desk with the PA machine on it. An idea strikes, and she smiles toward the ceiling. She looks around her cautiously to see if anyone is around. The room is empty. She sneaks over to the PA machine on tip-toes, and sits down in the administrator’s chair. She presses the button on the PA and says, “[Bully’s Name] please come to the office immediately. Your mommy is here to pick you up. The time of your ballet recital has been changed to 1:00.” The bully is approaching the boy again, but stops when he hears this on the PA. The boy laughs at the bully, who’s face is frozen in terror. He runs away.
The girl walks out and finds the boy standing there, laughing. The girl laughs, too, and they walk off together.
THE END.
by Jen, Jen, and Isabella
This is a good treatment, but i dont feel that there is a resolution, I feel like its a mystery or kept open for people to think about what the girl is going to do next.
ReplyDeletethis is cute and relates to amelie, but seems like it will be too long. what i learned in this class, short films are really no longer than maybe 3 short scenes. You might want to cut it down a bit. This is a lot like Christian's past film called "manipulator" or something like that, but i like the idea of it. and the ending seems pretty fitting as well.
ReplyDeleteI like how the protagonist gets what she wants in the end and everything goes in her favor. I also like how you used her sketches as an important metaphor about her emotions. Overall, I do think this would be an interesting short film to do.
ReplyDeleteFrom what I can tell, the protagonist somewhat has the characteristics of Amelie: the innocence and whimsicalness. I like the ending because it makes me wonder the possibilities of what the girl will draw next.
ReplyDeleteThe plot is good very detailed and interesting. I feel like you could take out some unneeded parts and make it shorter and more straight forward; but it's a good beginning. The ending is I think the most exciting, because like others said it keeps the audience wanting more and wondering whats next, what is the character going to do next. Great start!
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